[Critique] Fiver26's Plot (The Story Has Passed!)

*pictures are only the outside/top of everything, there is hidden/underground areas you should explore before giving ideas)
*pictures very not up to date*
Rank #4
Plot ID #2181
Theme of build- 4 major(ish) Biomes


Once again i have been rejected! (this is the message )


I will take this time in stride and unfold the story a bit more, but this time just not the Dirt Kingdom will be upgraded! This time it will be my least favorite place, the Winter/Snow Kingdom! Thats right folks, they've found the tunnel from the Dirt and bared it up, they've even opened their own mine and found many things! Like the Dirt they have taken to the sky with these materials, but unlike using magic they will go to industry! Thats right, they are modernizing and building airplane like devises to attack their enemy's. Currently the only thing changed is some landscaping and the tunnel bared so no updated pictures.
Hi all! This is your friendly internet issues player Fiver26 here! And boy could I use your help. A few months back I put my rank 4 plot up for review in order to see what comments it would get so I could make it so it would upgrade, well a month later I actually got the rejection (I knew it was coming, didn’t expect it to take so long though) but all it said on it was basically the same thing for the two comments. Needs more to it and dirt castles are unacceptable (though one suggested changing the dirt to clay). Now the thing is, my theme would not allow me to change the dirt to anything else.

My theme being 4 biomes of my choice in their own little kingdoms, some working together and others against, but mainly using resources you would find in those areas for the build. Foresty river area got mainly wooden buildings with bridges and a mineshaft for their cobble, desert area got sandstone structures (which I hate btw, but it took forever so it stays) snow area got dark wood and plains got dirt(and now some cobble/lava) structures.

Of course I know I probably need more things, I’ve already changed the dirt castle to something else dirt, but I need some help figuring out what those things are so it won’t (hopefully) take a month next time it gets reviewed, or hey, better idea! It gets approved next time!

Here are some screenshots of the thing, feel free to go check it out in person!
(there are some secret areas underground, find those yourself )


*Currently working on*
-More trees in Foresty area
-stumps in forest
-Toying with more pillars for Dirt Kingdom
-Loathing the Desert
-some actual mines in forest area
-some more to interior of forest
-hoping it takes less than a month, even with holidays, to get reviews (around 12-16-13 i think)
-Getting Suggestions from you!
-Mines in Snow
-Technology
-Upgrading some of the buildings in Forest for attack fortification
-Adding craters in dirt/sand/forest
-More not so simple things to make the snow area look more modern

*added*
-different trees in forest
-some underground things in dirt
-some rooms off of trading tunnels
-secret area under desert well
-im not good at interiors when theirs not much space so its as good as it gets in the forest kingdom
-area by water pillar and lava spot for siphoning
-allot of stuff under dirt kingdom
-Mines in forest

 

I remember this build from when I was in that plot size, Barry and me had a discussion about it too. You had not finished it yet of course and the sandstone temple was incomplete.

I like the sandstone temple most. Clean simple lines, with subtle symmetry and something inside to pull the eye in. Nice.

Your concept is unflawed. Four Biomes, each with it's own distinction. You have done a ton of placing, (Terraforming), but it is hidden to everyone as ground and I am sure we all want to see more structures and amazing things you come up with.

This is only my opinion and it is meant to be just an opinion.

Keep trying Fiver; I had to do a complete plot clear once when I thought I would be accepted but infact was rejected.

 

Thank you!

 

Only thing that I can think of is a variation of blocks for the desert temple. Stone brick goes really well with sandstone, as does dark logs. Other than that, fantastic work.

 

Thanks for the words of praise on this ^.^ (and hotfires, i would make some changes like the ones you suggested, but within the kingdoms the winter and desert are not the best friends, neither with the forest, so getting dark wood and stone would be difficult for them)

 

Put some clay in your water,(river), that will give you clay blocks as an option to make hardened clay and then dye the clay. more block options for your dirt biome.

Each biome has a special unique block specific to each biome when mining. Desert biomes yield end stone blocks. Ocean biomes yield quartz, and so on.

So now each biome has 2 more blocks to use, hope that helps a little.

What about a multi level Trading hub in the very center of the plot, for each biome's merchants to obtain needed items. Multi level so as to avoid confrontation between each biome at the hub.
just throwing out spam to you Fiver - with hopes to inspire

 

I think it just needs a tad bit more detail. Other than that, it is marvelous!

 

? but there are things on the insides, the only thing with nothing is the Sand Kingdom Temple

 

thanks for the in-depth ideas! Ive actually taken a few and put them into the build already, im just having issues trying to make the dirt kingdom buildings bigger, they just dont look like they fit in to anything :/ . Ive updated a list of things ive added, as well as my task list so you know what im planning on working on for it next :3 thanks for the help!

 

*updated main post*

 

Fiver - put more buildings on the ground outside in each biome. When they say that they see lots of the same, I think it refers to the trees and land.. Do more structures, buildings and such outside in each biome.

Too much sand in sand biome, lots of the same - see what I mean? Add more buildings is the way to go I think *not really sure*

 

it looks nice but i agree with adding more on to the sandstone part...

 

i have actually added a bit to each biome already, and the pictures here are rather out of date because of it (though remember, in a time when technology obviously isnt really a thing, not much would be in a desert because of the heat, some things have already changed but still, common sense)

 

This is for people to offer a bit of critique to someone, or to give tips on how to make a drawing or story better, or to discuss collaborations between the artists.
It's a place for us to share our opinions on each others works and to try and help each other get better, and to work together. So please keep it civil and constructive.

 

Are you a time traveler from 2014?